Nature Walk Descriptive Essay
Though there is nothing special about my garden; the usual trees and flowers, with some animals too, but it is meaningful to me.
The introduction with the door handle, trying to avoid being heard and sweating in suspense sets the scene of a Bond film, so reading about snails and moths for seven paragraphs is a little disheartening.
My bare feet touch the cold tiles as my fingers run along the hibiscus flowers and my eyes are treated to a feast of colors and sights.
It stimulates all my senses- my eyes do not know what to look at first, I can smell the fresh air, I hear the leaves rustling against each other and the sounds of the small creatures that dwell amongst the plants, I feel the texture of the flowers, plants, and even the dirt, and I can taste the freshness of the morning dew.
I would rewrite the introduction so that it prepares the reader for the actual body of the essay.
Still, this is a brilliant essay.)My eyes catch the scattered night-time drops of dew as they are illuminated by the pale light of the moon.